here is part of a storyboard sequence i did for some local screen writers for a potential pitch- since I did not get paid i will post- if there is a beef- i will take it down- here goes
Panel 3 looks like a "grabbing" gesture. It did not immediately register that the character was knocking.
The pacing from panels 4 to 8 is excellent. Drawings in 4 and 7 are particularly nice. Is 6 a POV? it reads like one, but the angles are inconsistent and because of that I am not clear of the spatial relationship of the characters. 6 looks like a POV, but 11 seems to show the characters coming from the doorway at left which means that 6 was intended to be an establishing shot. This does not make sense because you are not showing the 2 characters. 8 is clearly a tight shot from the POV of the character in panel 7, but the angle is wrong. I'd expect it to be from the other side of the character (flopped).
If you were to visualize this in plan view where would the cameras be, and would it make sense to place them there?
Panel 3 looks like a "grabbing" gesture. It did not immediately register that the character was knocking.
ReplyDeleteThe pacing from panels 4 to 8 is excellent. Drawings in 4 and 7 are particularly nice. Is 6 a POV? it reads like one, but the angles are inconsistent and because of that I am not clear of the spatial relationship of the characters. 6 looks like a POV, but 11 seems to show the characters coming from the doorway at left which means that 6 was intended to be an establishing shot. This does not make sense because you are not showing the 2 characters. 8 is clearly a tight shot from the POV of the character in panel 7, but the angle is wrong. I'd expect it to be from the other side of the character (flopped).
If you were to visualize this in plan view where would the cameras be, and would it make sense to place them there?